Although you have a good beginning, the essay jumps around a lot. There's no logical sequence/order to the "middle" of the essay. There also isn't much of an "end."
We also needed some close ups to indicate where we are/were. You have a few in the middle, and some are obvious, but some are not.
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Good! Nice mix of people and places.
ReplyDeleteLiked #23 and #67! Very cool!
Although you have a good beginning, the essay jumps around a lot. There's no logical sequence/order to the "middle" of the essay. There also isn't much of an "end."
We also needed some close ups to indicate where we are/were. You have a few in the middle, and some are obvious, but some are not.
Where are your magic hour pics?